This is such a cool idea. It’s a great example of finding the right platform to support your narrative. It helps that in constructing the narrative, we don’t really know much about the “voice” of the Wright brothers so you have creative license. Please, please, please tell me that there is a startup launch/teaser video coming. For revision on this piece: continue to refine your use of language and to experiment with the platform. For example, how could feedback enhance the project? Who would their contemporary interlocutors be? How would Richard Pearse respond? Or Richard Branson, for that matter? This might also be of interest: http://www.washingtonpost.com/blogs/worldviews/wp/2015/01/04/indians-invented-planes-7000-years-ago-and-other-startling-claims-at-the-science-congress/  For revision, have fun with it and push it even further.