Kim's feedback for Yidan's sound object


It seems as though you had a lot of fun making this! There are parts of it that work really well but in other parts, the relationship between meaning through the sound and meaning through the spoken word becomes imbalanced. Mostly this can be split between the sections in which you have the male narrator speaking (too heavily reliant on spoken word) and the ones in which your actors are speaking dialogue (less of an imbalance). For revision, be sure to smooth out any abrupt transitions. If you can use more dialogue instead of the narration, this might improve the balance so that sound is doing more of the signifying.