Kim's sound feedback for Bobby


 

The interplay between the guitar sounds and the speaker are...interesting. I can't help but read the dominant and somewhat noisy guitar playing as trying to overwhelm the words being read about identity. There are a lot of moments where I can't even hear what is being said. The problem is I can't tell if this is you strategically trying to signify something or if you just need to bring up the volume on the speaker. For revision, focus on trying to strengthen the signification of the piece. Partially this can be done with a title, but also by thinking about how the two layers, guitar and speaker, work with or against one another. Can you add, subtract, or move things around to make explicit the relationship between them? And of course, cite your sources, even if your source is yourself.